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Dragon smoke...............................Prose Q2
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This was a goal piece in which I wanted to write a psychedelic piece in first person. When thinking about what type of piece I wanted to write I decided that I wanted it to be a psychedelic piece. I let my mind child go crazy while keeping this in mind. Of course, this piece somehow came to be one about drugs. I couldn’t really understand why but even though it needed more editing and it was difficult for the reader to understand what was going on sometimes I really liked it and didn’t want to change it too much. Even though this piece needs more editing and some sentences are clumsy and hard to understand I’m extremely proud of my story. The whole point of being high is that everything is weird and changing and we can’t comprehend it so I’m glad that that’s how the reader feels. A sentence which I particularly enjoy is; “A man in purple sits beside me, his star woven eyelashes and clothes melt from the heat that comes from from the fireplace where energetic golden fish play tag with one another, you can hear the smacking of their fins.” I like the descriptive imagination which this story has.
Sailor....................................Poetry Q4
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This poem was written very quickly, it is actually the last piece I wrote before publishing my portfolio. I was thinking of what I could write for this portfolio since I was still missing a piece and I remembered a song from the musical "Heathers" which talks about depression and a life boat so I decided to write something similar to it. This piece has not been through peer editing or even edited a lot but I want to and I will probably edit it and/or ask a friend to read it in the future. A quote from "Sailor" is; " I am a sailor in the eye of a storm, and I have fallen from my ship into the eye of a hurricane". I like this quote because it shows the a grimnes and gravity of what's happening to this person and it makes you feel a lot of strong emotions. It is also a great ending to the poem. This poem is very new and it hasn't been subjected to much editing so it still has a lot of rough areas and places where it can improve. I would like to work on the descriptiveness of the poem and expand and exploit the moment where the sailor is being dragged under the surface.