May Bull..................................Poetry Q4
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I needed to write a new piece and since it was the month of May and I was born in may I decided I would write a piece about it. I didn't really know how to write about it so I decided to look up everything related with May, write random sentences that came to mind, edit it and use it in a poem. I ended up using the bull as the main character because "Taurus" is May's astrological sign and the bull encompasses it and the people born in May perfectly. I also used talked about other things that occur around that time like flower and fires. I actually wrote a lot of first drafts for this poem, and almost all of them had the bull running in them so that's something I kept. I think this piece has a lot of potential and I love the idea. However, I'm not completely satisfied with it and believe it could still be improved in areas which I cannot identify. I want to submit it to more editing with Mr. Chase. One part of the piece I will keep however, is: "He glides, the heavens like firm ground under the rhythmic trampling of his hooves”. I really like this quote because it paints very beautiful image and perfectly describes the feelings that May gives to me and hopefully, the reader. I like how descriptive my poem is and i think it’s one of its strengths.
Nervous.................................. Poetry Q4
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I got the idea for this piece while I was preparing for my AP World History exam. It's an incredibly difficult exam and I was stressed out and nervous from studying and pressure. I decided to write a poem about all the things I was feeling and this piece came out. I feel that this piece has a lot of potentials but it still needs a lot of work and editing. A lot of sentences and words sound weird, it's not flowing fluently. Of all of my pieces in this portfolio, I think this is the one that needs the most work. This is a descriptive and easily relatable piece. We've all felt this way when we're nervous about tests or other things."Forget her body, if you think that's bad, take a look at what's inside her head." Up until this quote, I had been describing what she felt physically and I used this line to transition the poem into what she was feeling and thinking. I think this poem could be a good rap if it got some good editing.
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