Preparatory School Writer's Festival 2019 | Page 30

Guildford Grammar Preparatory School
Writing Festival
2019
Narratives
Student writing sample:
Lies
by Isabella McAtee
26/2/2003 Tuesday 12/7/2010 Monday
My Dad lives on a farm with me. He works really hard. I love him,
he loves me. But he lies. To me and for me. He lies that he has
money, he lies about being happy, he lies that he’s not hungry
and he lies that he’s not tired. I know so I help him. I help him
clean the house, I help him make dinner. I help him on the farm,
I feed his horse. Today I saw him resting on some hay. I went out
to lie with him because I thought he was sleeping. I saw two men
run off the farm with a gun. I stayed with him. Even though he
was gone. Tonight, I’m going out with my girlfriend, Tamika, we’re
celebrating her birthday, even though it’s in a week, she’s visiting
her family then. I wish we could go other places but we must
stay near the hospital, in case anything goes wrong, you know
how she has trouble with her sight, it’s getting worse. She
might go blind soon, very soon. I’m getting a guide dog for her
birthday, she loves Labradors, the Lab’s name is Genesis. She’s
currently 11 months old, still a young puppy!
7 years of depression and suffering went by
3/7/2010 Saturday
“Hey Dad, I miss you! It’s my 14th birthday today. I hope you’re
proud. I’m in year 8 now. I got a dog today. I still love you Dad!
I’m living with Grandma, but she’s in hospital, she had trouble
breathing last night. So, her neighbour, Leigh is looking after me.
I know Grandma will be okay. Tomorrow I have a job interview
at a pet store. My friend ditched me, she said I’m always so
depressed, but don’t worry Dad, it’s not your fault, I could have
saved you remember. It’s my fault Dad!”
16/7/2010 Friday
Today I got a call from the hospital, Grandma passed away. Her
heartbeat slowed down a lot at around 3 in the morning and
she left. I’ve moved in with Leigh, she’s basically my own mum,
the one I wish I had when I needed her. But on the bright side,
it’s Tamika’s actual birthday in a few days! I can’t wait for her to
meet Genesis. She’s a really good dog!
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17/7/2010 Saturday
Today I got another call from the hospital, it’s Tamika, she’s gone
fully blind, looks like she’s getting an early birthday present! I
hope she likes Genesis! I’ll update when I give Genesis to her.
UPDATE: She loves Genesis, but she’s really upset about losing
98.6% of her vision, she said she can only see bright colours like
red, green and purple, and light. But no other colours or shapes
or anything else really.