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Down a Rabbit Hole
Prose - 288 Q4
I have absolutely no idea what I was trying to do with this piece or how it happened. It was a mission of mine that before this school year ended I would write Vania’s love story, and this was suppose to be it, yet I have no clue what happened. Originally, this was a piece to try something new, Mr. Chase called it our Creative Fun piece. So I thought why not mix: second person, with fantasy, with a love story and a lot of description.
This piece wouldn’t have been publishable without the help of my friends. First of all, Marion she was the first person to read this weird piece. What I wanted from her was her understanding of the events. What she said helped me gain direction to where I was headed and then clean up some doubts. Vania is who brought this piece to life. She helped me give it form, and break up the ideas, as well as help with some grammar mistakes. Then, Jimena managed the finishing touches which made it better.
Honestly, I don’t think it’s a bad piece or anything. I’ve definitely written worse things but it’s not my favorite and I have no idea where it’s going. There’s a lot of goofy sentences that I really like for example, “Why is something inside your mind, less true that what’s tangible?.” but the piece itself isn’t doing much. But the worse part it the ending “Now, you can’t even remember your trip down a rabbit hole.” like, what? What do I mean by this? Well I guess it’s open to the reader’s interpretation.