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The Staring
Q4 Non Fiction page 07
I wrote this piece because I wanted to write something to my mother in Mother’s day that meant a lot to me. I get really frustrated with my mom because of the little things that she does. We are really different when we are talking about taste in clothes and both of us have very strong opinions about everything, and always want to be right. Writing this piece, I realized that my mother does a lot of things that I don’t like in order to protect me. That is what the piece is about. I first wanted this piece to be a fictional story because I was really shy and embarrassed about other people reading the problems I had with my mom. I wanted to make up characters and situations that were similar to mine, but when I started I figured that It would be a bad idea, and that If I was going to read this to my mom, it had to be REAL and from my heart. I don’t feel that this piece is very strong, just because I made it so personal, and the vocabulary and structure of the piece is very simple. I don’t really care about it not being strong because when I read it to my mom she cried and hugged me, and that’s all I wanted to achieve. There is a quotation that says “Is she staring at the pimple in my forehead, or at my brain?” I find this quote to be good, because I think I expressed exactly what I wanted to say, I used a lot of comparisons and it’s true.
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Smile Fiction
Q3 Fiction page 08
I got the idea of this piece after watching a movie called “The Room” that is about a girl who is kidnapped by a man, put into a room and was sexually assaulted by him. She ends up having a child with the man, even when he didn’t care, but the mother did care, so she took care of him. The evolution of this piece was weird, because it was a prose before, but I decided that it would be best to change it to a poem. I did this because when I do poetry, I tend to write shorter lines, and I felt that for this story, shorter lines and words that meant much more than a paragraph. I feel this piece is strong, but a little confusing. When my classmates read it, they felt that I needed to clear some things up, instead of adding a lot of story to the piece, and when I read it again, I agreed with them. I didn’t necessarily changed a lot of the piece, because I thought that I would take the sense of it. “But when he’s gone, her pearls bloom, while we take out the hidden chocolate ice cream, and eat it till our mouths freeze.” This quote from the poem is very good because in so little I described pain, joyfulness and innocence with metaphors and words that were not very direct, but the reader could still know what I was talking about. “Good luck lady…” This is a quote from the poem that I wasn’t very proud about. It’s the last line of the poem, and I wrote it thinking the reader would understand that the woman that is narrating the poem was wishing the man’s mistress luck because she knew that he would hurt her. But again, after showing the poem to my classmates, and them telling me that they didn’t quite understand, wasn’t good.