Writers Tricks of the Trade Vol. 5, Issue 4 | Page 22
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TEN WAYS TO UPGRADE YOUR MANUSCRIPT (CONT’D)
Example of dash: (From “A Clown in the Trunk” by Maralys Wills)
“Never mind all those suitcases stuffed with sweaters and jackets, once
again the garb-de-jour was shorts—an Alaska neatly customized for
Rob!”
Example of Ellipses: “He croaked in a scratchy voice, ‘You’re a . . .
whore.’”
4. ADD SENTENCE VARIETY—WITH SHORT . . . OR LONG . . . SENTENCES
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Don’t get trapped in endless, medium-length sentences. Make some sentences
short. One word. Just a few words. Then juxtapose sentence fragments with
sentences that are very long and seemingly go on forever, as if the reader had all
the time in the world. Pretend he does.
5. USE PREPOSITIONS TO ADD MORE SENTENCE VARIETY
Don’t fall into a repetitious Subject . . . Verb . . . Object pattern.
your sentences with prepositions. They add instant variety.
Possible prepositions: “Under” “Over” “From” “Beneath” “Into” “Beyond”
“Within” “Besides” “Outside” (There are many others)
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Example: “Outside his line of sight, he sensed something threatening
had crept closer, that if he didn’t turn around immediately, the thing
would leap on top of him.”
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Prepositions can be chosen arbitrarily. Complex sentences almost always flow
from a prepositional start.
6. UPGRADE ALL DIALOGUE
The beauty of being a writer is we have time to make our characters wittier than
we are. Or more cutting. Or more concise. Or more brilliant. Or better
informed. All characters in books must say interesting things. Nobody can
afford to be boring. Good dialogue gets that way by constant upgrading . . .
sometimes over and over.
Characters never say the dull, boring things we hear at the grocery store
everyday.
7. GET RID OF MOST “AS” SENTENCES
Don’t string your sentences together with “As.” This construction quickly
becomes noticeable.
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In most “As” sentences, both halves of the sentence are weakened.
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