sadness in her eye. Not because she is being torn to shreds by the own beings she created and loved. “ While this is a piece which I truly enjoy I think it still needs improvement on some lines and aspects. I would like to fix certain sentences and to end it on a stronger note and with more impact on the reader.
Under the Moonlight........................Prose Q2
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In this piece it was a goal to write about murder and be more descriptive.
The morning I wrote this piece the moon was still in the sky even though it was daylight and it was incredibly beautiful. So when faced with the task of writing this new piece I decided to incorporate its dark beauty, elegance, mystery and both the romantic and horrible things that happen under its nightly reign. I immediately knew I wanted it to be about a girl who was murdered in a dumpster but that to the moon even this gruesome sight seemed beautiful. From the start I knew exactly how and what I wanted to write. I actually had the inspiration for this piece while I was doing this portfolio so I couldn’t really have it checked by my peers since they were so busy. I hope to improve it after the portfolios are turned in. A quote I enjoy from this piece is “..Its pale light highlights a lone pair of white beautiful legs hanging out of it. One foot is bare, its shoe lies on the ground. “ I like that this piece is very dark and mysterious but I don’t think the atmosphere is at the level it should be and that I have not edited it enough so that it is as perfect as I imagine it.
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