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make a lot of sense. At the first glance, the untraditionally lengthy sentences may scare away readers, as they scared me away at the start. However, when one dives into the reading, the sentences become quite simple to comprehend because Didion communicated her ideas very clearly and in doing so, she avoided pretentious and unnecessary words. The structure and organization of the essay support the author’s clear and simplistic way of writing, as she clearly describes the sequential order of events that altered her opinion of New York. The descriptive essay of the marvels and pitfalls of New York is intended for a younger audience, for those who are interested in the reality of the state, rather than the magical idea of it. The language is quite informal in the essay, making it seem more personal, sort of like a very private entry in a diary. Her experiences described are very raw and authentic and the numerous descriptive sentences portray New York in its truthful and stripped manner, without falsely idealizing the place. The evidences used by the author to support the point that New York is not a place for everyone, are from her own personal experiences, thus they cannot be considered as foolproof information since the evidences are very subjective. The author’s personality and preferences play a crucial role when it comes to describing the place, and as a result of this bias, the essay cannot be considered as an unimpeachable piece of writing. Another author may have experienced New York quite differently. Thus, the arguments provided by Didion are not supported by sufficient evidence since there are no outside sources or any data that back up Didion’s statements about New York. The shift from the positive side of New York to the negative is quite evident in the essay and there is a comprehensible turning point where, suddenly, everything becomes negative. For example, Didion provided an argument that the parties in New York are quite fascinating as one can meet an abundance of very different people, however, later in the essay, she states that she 2