It Takes Bravery (Q3) Poem pg. 14
When writing this poem, I didn’t really know where I was going. I was trying to make a judgement to how society expect you to think and act, and with this incite in the reader a desire to follow their own passions. When going through the peer editing, they suggested I expand in a couple of ideas that could help the message of the poem. This would be giving a stronger visual to “feeling in vibrant colors”. As well as, explaining what I mean by fear and danger. Doing so, I believe, helped me more solid basis to what the drive I was trying to leave the reader with. Even though this is not a mind-blowing poem, I think I did a good job on sticking to my goal and both reflecting myself and make my reader think about what they read. A line where I show this is in the analogy of writing fonts, “Society is/ A 12 point,/ 1.5 spaced/ Arial font.” I think it comes naturally to the reader to imagine this metaphor and understand it. I think a weakness this poem has is how it can jump around from idea to idea really quickly and small details that are important for the meaning of the poem may be lost in it. This for example in the idea of society's pathological fear for difference—even though I tried to break it down even more.